Some people say I write dark poems better, so I am trying my hands at sugary sweet... what do you think?
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Why I cry
I love the love you make me see
A love I love with all of me
Like clouds of blue beneath a bird
I soar above my years of dread
These tears you see are not of pain
But are of joy, look what I’ve gained
Each time our fingers come entwined
I feel I hold your heart in mine
I read the words inside your eyes
And know we’ll never say goodbye
These tears you see are not of pain
But my love, you are such sweet gain
I came to you with so much fear
You hushed them with kisses so dear
Calm like I never felt before
Making me love you more and more
These tears, my love, are not of pain
I sure would know, look what I’ve gained
6 years ago
21 more steps:
beautiful
I defnitely know i will be singing this line
"these tears are not tears of pain"
when I eventually meet 'the one' coz Lord knows its been such a bumpy steep and treacherous path for me this road called love.
WOW atlast am a firstie here,,ill tell you though i have a familiar poem we will talk i love it.You write with indepth and soul.How are you?
cool! Keep it up
This is really nice. You know what I mean...
I admire your trying out a different hue to your poetically tinted voice.
@MDM: I know exactly what you mean... But 'THE one'is somewhere out there, I assure you.
@Robyn: like I always say... you are first in my head.
@tommeh: looks like it's your first time here... thanks for showing
@Wole: err... i think i know what you mean :)
@Naaps: where is the 'but'? lol
"These tears, my love, are not of pain."
I like!
Lovely mi-lady
please write what u feel if it is dark so what its what u feel
i love this
"I came to you with so much fear
You hushed them with kisses so dear
Calm like I never felt before
Making me love you more and more"
nice, very nice
HEY YOU THOUGHT I COULD DROP BY,,,MISSED THIS BLOG FOR AWHILE.
Poetic thoughts are not to be dictated. They flow from the fill of the soul and i think you should swim with the tide of your soul stream. I love your poems
Ahem...
"I love the love you make me see
A love I love with all of me"?!?
My God, Fangface, you'll be the death of me yet. This is so sugary it's sickly. :P (that's the emoticon for losing my dinner) Even the structure is so regular you could sell it to Swiss watchmakers. If this is what love has done to you I don't want none of it!
Here, let me try. (You can stick this on the end and regain your standing as a bona fide wet blanket; no charge.)
But in the end, as endings come
A car door slammed, exit therefrom
Of you, and all the joy you brought
Of light, of love and smiling thoughts
Now fall the tears you will not see
Of pain, and rage, and misery
must i say this again,,NOW AM SCREAMING "POST POST POST"
Simple and elegant. Most poetry is pretty much mysterious to me. I liked this one. Great blog!
Hmmm...
Beautiful stuff. I think I'm a fan of the dark poems. Somehow they resonate. Almost like a beauty in the broken.
Will definitely be back for more.
Cheers.
swerri' happy new month'
i used to write a lot of poetry, and find your latest poem to be very good. especially for your first try in a different genre.
good job! both writing what naturally comes and stretching to alternative styles can be a great process! keep it up! i applaud and commend you!
i was definitely moved by your poem, and that is one of the most important points of art: to evoke emotion in the reader/viewer.
This is beautiful...and romantic...gosh I feel like shedding a tear of joy
Lovely...sweet...makes u wanna fall in love...
Thank you all so much for your wonderful comments. Sorry I've been awol. love y'all. Update tomorrow. I PROMISE!!!!
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